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I keep my broken teeth
in tiny velvet bags,
never to be seen
nor judged by scarlet eyes.

Haemolacrial purges of
my deepest secrets
have splattered over
these fabric coffins,
leaving irremovable stains
on their delicate lacings.

I tie their ribbons together,
then slowly stitch them
over my gaping wounds,
finding solace in the company
of rusting needles.

Silence and scartissue
grow over and upon me,
and my eyes are sealed shut
by this vicious fungus.

I wish I could just open
these fragile caskets
and let the scarabs inside
devour my disease.

If only I could tip over
these delicately patterned vaults
and re-attach my shattered teeth;
Then no silence could erode me,
nor scartissue devour me.

I would remove these ribbons
from around my trachea
and take my very first breath,
my very first step into the unknown
realm of joy and passion.

But I am paralyzed.
I remain here in a cage of velvet,
masticating my ravaged wings
with broken teeth.
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Author's Comments

Still not happy with the ending, but I think it's an improvement.

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:iconghost-of-ink:
Very dark and haunting atmosphere, and you created it within the first few lines as well. The whole image is quite disturbing, but amazing at the same time.

I really need to go through the rest of your gallery.

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"The world is rarely seen in color, because no one wants to be holding the paint brush."

"It's never about what you get in the end, it's the wisdom you gain getting there."
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Powerful and dark.
Unusual but awesome imagery :)

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..:skullbones: Aedammair-Feline :skullbones:..

I wanna hurt you just to hear you screaming my name....

:bulletpink: Rip your heart out at =RawEm0tion :bulletpink:
:iconsapient-butterfly:
Definately dark and haunting imagery. I agree about the ending something feels not quite right or unfinished as if it doesn't quite do the rest of the piece justice. But otherwise nicely done :)
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Thank you very much. :) When I've it edited I'll repost it.

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Silence is golden, but duct tape is silver!
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Thank you. :)

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Silence is golden, but duct tape is silver!
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:eager: =Pickled-Poppy's new competition! Go go GO!:eager:
:iconbloodstainaffiliate:
Thank you. I was just in that kind of mood and thought of my secrets as broken teeth. How? Why? No idea!

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Silence is golden, but duct tape is silver!
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:eager: =Pickled-Poppy's new competition! Go go GO!:eager:
:iconsapient-butterfly:
Nicely edited, it feels more complete now. I love the final two lines :)
:iconghost-of-ink:
The best ideas are often off the wall. :D Plus they make the imagery amazing.

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"The world is rarely seen in color, because no one wants to be holding the paint brush."

"It's never about what you get in the end, it's the wisdom you gain getting there."
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I love good imagery, it really gets me. I have a poetry workshop tomorrow. :excited:

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Silence is golden, but duct tape is silver!
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:eager: =Pickled-Poppy's new competition! Go go GO!:eager:

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